【简介】感谢网友“雕龙文库”参与投稿，这里小编给大家分享一些，方便大家学习。
实例指导1----Internet VS Literature
请根据以上表格的内容,写一篇短文,包括以下内容:
1. 调查时间、调查问题以及调查对象；
2. 不同的意见所占的比例及其理由；
3. 你自己的看法。
要求:
1. 词数120-150；
2. 不要逐字翻译。
网络会促进文学发展"观点的有210人,即占总调查人数的70%,而持相反观点的则占30%；持前一种观点的学生们和后者都有他们自己的观点。通过这样对写作任务给出的信息的整理分析,我们在写作时就会有一个清晰的思路,而且不容易遗漏要点。通过对信息的总结,我们可以避免对照材料逐字翻译的毛病,并使文章更加简洁。
3. 在讲明了调查的相关信息之后,一定不要遗漏"发表自己的看法"这一部分,如果只单纯介绍调查报告的相关信息而不发表自己的看法,这篇文章就是不完整的,就不符合写作任务的要求了。在发表自己的观点时,你可以选择支持前一种观点,也可以选择支持后一种观点,也可以做一个总结,说两种观点都有一定的道理,应该发扬网络的优点来促进文学的发展,并注意采取一定的措施来防止网络可能对文学造成坏的冲击。这几种观点都是可以的,但是不要一会支持前者,一会支持后者,到最后都没有说明自己的观点。
初稿:
这篇文章的条理较清晰,包含了调查的相关信息和自己的观点,基本涵盖了写作任务要求包含的各个方面。语言也比较简洁、清晰,成功地将写作任务给出的材料信息进行总结并用自己的话表述出来了,并未对材料逐字翻译,这些都是这篇文章的优点所在。但是这篇文章还是存在不妥的地方:
1. 遗漏了部分信息。首先,写作任务中要求文章包含调查对象,而在介绍调查对象时,文章遗漏了"高三年级"这部分信息,只是模糊地说明300名学生。再者,文章在给出支持或反对的理由的时候,并没有涵盖表格中给出的所有内容。
2. 发表自己的观点的部分前后不统一,自相矛盾。前半句话说"In my opinion, the former opinion is right",说明作者支持第一种观点,然而后半句却讲的是网络有消极影响,这样就造成了自己观点的前后矛盾。3. 结尾部分有点偏离主题,本写作任务并未涉及到是否应该鼓励人们去读经典名著的问题。
成稿:
Last week, the English Learning Club in our school made a survey among all the 300 Senior 3 students in our school on "what influence the Internet has on literature". The results are as follows:
Students who believe that the Internet has a positive influence make up about 70% of all the students interviewed. In their opinion, the Internet allows common people to take part in the creation of literature, making literature-creating a more popular phenomenon. Moreover, the Internet makes it easy for a good work to be known to the public. However, the other students have a different opinion. They argue that the Internet provides only "fast food literature" and not all the works on the Internet are good reading materials.
In my opinion, they both are partly right. The Internet is a coin with two sides when it comes to literature. We should make use of the positive side to promote the development of literature and try to avoid the bad influence it may bring at the same time. It is we people who can decide what influence it may have on literature.
Powerful sentences:
1. Internet, the media giant, has both a positive influence and a negative influence on literature.
2. Literature is food for people’s spirits. It is hard for people to live a colorful and happy life without it.
3. Classic literature works are the fruits of great minds. They are the treasure of all human beings.
实例指导2----art festival
你们学校在学期末举办了一次艺术节(art festival)。请按下列要点写一篇120词左右的文章:
①你们班要在星期五下午聚会以庆祝艺术节。
②先是音乐、舞蹈活动。
③接下来是各种比赛。
④5点钟以后是最激动人心的节目——烹饪比赛。
⑤虽然艺术节结束了,但你们仍意犹未尽。
写作指导
初稿:
Our school held an art festival at the end of the term. On Friday afternoon, our class had a party to celebrate the festival.
First we had music and dance. My friend Mary sang a pop song. And some others gave us dances. All these made us very happy.
Then we had some competitions. The most exciting program is the cooking competition after 5 pm. Each group had to make some special dishes. At once students became cooks; they are very happy, though most of them cook by themselves for the first time. At seven o’clock all dishes were ready. "Oh, they taste delicious," we all said happily.
At last we have to finish our party.
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成稿:
Our school held an art festival at the end of the term. On Friday afternoon, our class had a party to celebrate the festival.
First we had music and dancing. My friend Mary sang a pop song. Some others danced for us. We were all very
happy.
Then we had one competition after another. Before we knew it, it was five o’clock. The most exciting program began: the cooking competition. Each group had to make some special dishes. The students had turned into cooks, though they couldn’t tell salt from sugar the day before.
At last we had to finish our party. When we said goodbye to each other, we had the same feeling in our hearts: We want to have more wonderful times at school.
Powerful Phrases:(叙述事情经过)
first / at the beginning
next
at the same time / meanwhile then half an hour later / after a while / after that after they finished ...
later on
finally / in the end / at last
实例指导3----Keen on Films
写作任务:
现在同学们越来越钟情于外国动作大片,而对国产有关爱国教育的影片不感兴趣,校报英语角专栏针对此现象向同学们征稿,请同学们谈谈对这一现象的看法及理由。征文词数在140左右。
写作指导
4. 文章的末尾我们应进行简短的总结来突出我们的论点。
初稿:
Nowadays a number of students are fans of foreign films. They like these films because these films are exciting and interesting. But they ignore the patriotic films produced in China. They feel bored and sleepy when they watch the patriotic films. I think this view is wrong.
Although foreign films are exciting and interesting, we cannot deny that some Chinese films are also good. They also can bring us happiness and joy. And the important thing is that the patriotic films can teach us a lot. Some domestic films praise honesty, goodness and encourage our love for the nation. In this way, they are very good instruction for us. Not watching these films is totally wrong.
I think we should not only watch foreign films, but also watch the Chinese patriotic films.
成稿:
Patriotic films have greatly influenced several generations of our Chinese. Numerous people are inspired by the courage and wisdom of our revolutionists and soldiers. However, to some students those films are less attractive than the exciting Hollywood films, for there are no handsome actors or romantic love stories.
I cannot agree with those students on that. The reasons are as follows: Firstly, in comparison with foreign films, the Chinese patriotic films tell us the real touching and inspiring stories that happened in China years ago. From their stories, we know our happiness today owes to all their efforts and struggle. Secondly, a number of them are also great works, for example, Zhang Gathe Soldier Boy. We should get rid of the idea that patriotic films mean dull and boring.
In conclusion, I want to say, the outstanding patriotic films are also the record of the Chinese history. We students should not only watch them but also love them.
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实例指导4---- What kind of music do you like best?
写作任务: ????一家英文报社在中学生中开展了"What kind of music do you like best?"的调查,请你给报社写一封信谈谈你和你同学的观点。开头已为你写好,不计入字数。(词数:120左右)
Dear Editor,
All of our classmates are interested in your survey "What kind of music do you like best?"We had a heated discussion.
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写作指导
1. 这是一篇开放式作文,要确定文体、时态和写作要点。要用恰当的词语明确地表达自己和他人的观点。
1、文章基本完成了写作任务,表述了一些中学生在音乐方面喜好的信息及其原因。
2、但信息的描述有些模糊不清,主要是因为:缺乏恰当的过渡词,文章显得散乱,没有层次。比如:在Some students like classical music.前缺少一个转折连词。
3、用词重复,句式单一,缺少变化。比如:多次使用think表示看法。"They like / love music."是本文用来表达喜欢音乐的唯一句型。
成稿:
Dear Editor,
All of our classmates were interested in your survey "What kind of music do you like best?"
We had a heated discussion and found out we have different opinions. Most students like pop music, such as rock& roll, R&B, disco, jazz and hip-hop. Some have a deep love for hip-hop. They think that hip-hop can touch young people’s hearts. They say their favorite hip-hop singer is Jay Chou. However, a few students are fond of
classical music. In their opinion, classical music is more beautiful than pop music, and many classical works are precious cultural treasures. Personally speaking, I love all kinds of music that are beautiful, graceful, encouraging, touching and relaxing. As we all know, music is a part of our life. Music makes our world colorful.
1. 本文结构严密,是典型的"三段式"结构:第一段引出文章内容；第二段详细介绍同学们的观点；第三段概括总结。层次清楚、连贯,清楚地说出了当代中学生对音乐的想法。
2. 运用了恰当的过渡词和过渡句,段落之间、层次之间衔接自然流畅。如:however / personally speaking等。
3. 作者所用词汇和句型较丰富。例如:在表达观点时,用了不同的句式:They think ... / They say ...等等。
Powerful Patterns:
(表述自己或别人的观点)I think ...I believe ...I hold the view that ...I’m sure ...In my opinion, ...Personally speaking, ...Some people think / believe / hold that ...
实例指导5---- 谈音乐教育
写作任务: ????假如校报记者对你进行采访,想让你谈谈音乐教育对中学生学习、生活的影响。内容应包括以下几点:
1. 学校有必要开展音乐教育。
2. 音乐教育不但能丰富知识,还可以调节学习节奏和缓解精神压力。3. 音乐能够促进个人修养、增长技能、促进智力发展。
4. 一项新研究表明,音乐学习有助于促进儿童的记忆力发展。
5. 音乐艺术使人更具创造力。词数120左右。
明扼要；第二部分利用所提示的论据来充分阐述音乐教育对中学生学习、生活所产生的影响(即内容要点中的第二至五条),同学们可以充分利用这些论据,将其表述清晰,并适当添加连接成分,使其通顺连贯；第三部分做一个简短的总结,呼应文章的主题。
3. 写作过程中要注意用语的选择,这是一篇采访稿,在接受采访中,可以使用:I think ..., I believe ...等来表述观点和看法。其次,在论述过程中运用一些连接成分,如not only ... but also ... 等,这样可以将论据有机地结合起来。最后,在总结观点的时候,可以采用:in a word, to sum up等词组。而在引用研究结果作为论点时,可采用以下句式:a study / report shows that ...
初稿:
I think we should offer music lessons. People who don’t know music are lacking in knowledge because music is an important part of it.
Music not only helps us gain knowledge, but it can regulate our learning pace and relax the pressure of spirit. Music can help to cultivate students’ personality. At the same time our skills and mental development can be greatly promoted. According to a new study, learning music can help develop the children’s general memory skills. The art of music is very important to our creativity and it can save a nation’s culture.
成稿:
In my opinion, music lessons should be offered in middle schools because music plays an important part in our daily lives. Firstly, music education not only enriches our knowledge, but also regulates our learning pace and reduces our pressure. Secondly, music education helps to cultivate our minds by equipping us with more skills, which can promote our intellectual development. For example, a new study shows that learning music can help
improve children’s general memory skills. Finally, learning music also helps develop our creativity.
In short, I think music is very important for us and it can make our lives more colorful and interesting. As a matter of fact, most middle school students enjoy music very much.
Powerful sentences:
1. Music plays an important part in our daily lives.
2. Music education not only enriches our knowledge, but also regulates our learning pace and reduces our pressure.3. In short, I think music can make our lives more colorful and interesting.
实战演练
假如你作为班长,星期五在你们班英语口语课上组织了一次讨论,讨论围绕"Where do you get your music? Why?"展开。请你对这次讨论的结果写一篇总结交给英语老师。(词数:120左右)
Our class had a heated discussion on Friday about the topic "Where do you get your music? Why?".
We have many ways of getting music. First of all, we usually get music from the Internet —listening online or downloading songs to an MP3 player or other musical equipment. This way is the most popular, because it is free of charge as well as easy to manage. Music on the Internet is quickly renewed, so you can listen to the latest music. Another way of getting music is also popular—buying music CDs or DVDs. Although they cost a lot, some students have the hobby of collecting them. Of course, we have other ways to get music too, like listening to music by radio, and attending a live concert. In a word, life offers us different ways of getting music.
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My Favorite Film: Finding Nemo
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I love watching films, especially cartoons. My favorite one is Finding Nemo. It’s a tale of an interesting and
My Favorite Film: Finding Nemo
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??? I love watching films, especially cartoons. My favorite one is Finding Nemo. It’s a tale of an interesting and exciting journey of two fish: Marlin and his son Nemo. Nemo lost his mother when he was very young, and it was his father Marlin who brought him up. On Nemo’s first day of school, he was caught by a diver and taken to live in a fish tank in a doctor’s office. Marlin and his new friend Dory set out across the ocean to find Nemo. At the same time, Nemo and his tankmates were trying to find a way to get out of the tank before he became the doctor’s niece’s new pet. In the end, the father and son met again after many adventures in the sea.
假如你是校"春芽文学社"的一员,为了让同学们更加了解并热爱诗歌,社长邀请你们每位成员写一篇120词左右的文章,谈谈你对诗歌的认识。内容应包括:
1. 诗歌的语言精炼、表意深刻。
2. 大声颂读诗歌会令人兴奋；默读可以让人感到满足和快乐。
